The UCAS website is funny.

http://www.ucas.ac.uk/ucascard/statement.html

Its really harsh in its criticism of Arron's statement. I know its an example, but GOD, how scary are they?

"Aaron clearly thinks long words and complicated sentences impress. The result is that his sentence structure is irritating and he is likely to write about his career being "announced" instead of enhanced. Aaron writes things like "something for which to aim for in my educational studies" and impresses no one."